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privet school is better than public school,do you agree or not

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There is a common belief among people that private
schools
, in comparison with public
schools
, give better performances to their students.
While
 I disagree with
this
 idea,
this
 essay will present my personal view on both sides.
Firstly
, private
schools
 have high fees, which could be unreasonable and hard for some parents to afford and may lead to feelings of shame or being less than others in comparison, despite the fact that a large sum of money does not mean a high academic performance by any means.
In addition
 to
this
, private
schools
 may be the reason for societal stratification where people judge each other based on which "school" they went to.
On the other hand
, some people believe that private
schools
 have better performance than public
schools
 as they tend to have smaller class sizes, more attention from teachers, and access to resources that public
schools
 may not provide, which can be beneficial for a student's academic
success
.
While
 these points are valid, private
schools
 should not be seen as the only way to guarantee
success
. Public
schools
 may not have small classes and may contain large class sizes, but they often have access to additional resources
such
 as well-stocked libraries and extracurricular activities that can help a student grow in their academic and personal development.
While
 there is a lot of debate on the issue, it is important to recognise that private
schools
 should not be seen as the only path to academic
success
 and public
schools
 should not be ignored as they can provide a student with the necessary tools to achieve
success
.
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