Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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other than monetary funds developing nations require various forms of assistance from rich countries to alleviate their poverty.I completely agree with

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viewpoint and think that poor economies are in need of non-cash aid to escape poverty. First of all, financial aid will solve only temporary issues rather than focusing on lifetime or long-term solutions.

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, money funded by wealthy nations will be utilised for debt payment or for problems faced currently.Eventually, in the near ,future same issues will arise and

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again these countries will

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assistance.

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land like Africa, starve

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scarcity of food,

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supplying food for certain months, developed regions can provide essential materials or services to expand or improve farming

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as crop machinery and knowledge of cultivation.

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, Politicians can misuse or possibilities of corruption may occur if it is funded by cash. Commodities

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as food school furniture or services like improving the labour market or establishing a college will reduce the chances of corruption and

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will reach the appropriate people. ,

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government servants will poorly manage the fund given by these regions. For

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Sri Lanka is in need of universities for higher education,

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Australia or the British government can build a university in Srilanka, which will enhance the education system at the same time ministers cannot fill their pockets. In conclusion, Undeveloped

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are in need of other kinds of assistance than liquid currency in order to rebuild their poverty because cash aid will focus on

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and can easily misuse by the government.