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Social media has replaced the traditional methods of communicating and people use more and more of social media in communicate and to follow news and events. Some people think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion with example.

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Nowadays social
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the
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humans use for as a communication method.
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 of social
media
 than past. In
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 I will examine the pros and cons with my opinion. Looking for the beneficial side
firstly
, social
media
 can speed
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 the
information
 with internet facility than the other communication methods. Perceptional
information
 can be spread among
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society with the help of social
media
.
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 the earth quickly recently happen
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,
people
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 from all over the world
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about
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 it through social
media
 before telecasting from the news.
Secondly
, the apps can be
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 the phone so
it
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 can be carried anywhere. Meanwhile, the
information
 can be
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 not only anywhere but
also
 anytime.
For
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hashtag
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 very popular with
people
. If someone assesses attention all he wants to do is click the specific icon.
Furthermore
, as a disadvantage,
this
 platform can bring false
information
 to
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human. As many humans tend to use
this
, there are fake details, fake profiles,
false
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information
can
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 be spread.
For example
, someone can make a fake account profile of a popular person and can add wrong
information
 about him/her. So
this
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 that man/woman from the audience.
Likewise
,
people
 can tend to stand up against the government
also
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false details.
Nevertheless
, young teenagers being so addicted to
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smartphone. Young minds can quickly change with
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social
media
 because of
this
 young souls get inspired and get
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 in the true world and fantasy shown. In conclusion, my point of view is
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that
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people
 need
the
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information
 around the world so quickly and flexibility of usage of the internet.
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