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The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.

The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.
The table and pie chart compares the amount of income and sources of
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fish
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 imported to the US over 12 years from 1988 to 2000.
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, it is clearly observed that
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the
 highest total value of
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 imported is in 2000 and the lowest importation is in 1988.
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country that
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 had imported mostly from Canada at early and had dropped
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 the end of time
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 and in china grew
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. Starting with, 10.72 billion dollars in 2000, represented the vast majority of profit, followed by 8.52 and 6.57 billion dollars in the year
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1992 and 1988, respectively. With regard to, the country of
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 imported to the US illustrates that in
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1988 at 60% was the large percentage among other counties and dropped considerably in 2000
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 28%. Interestingly, the number of
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 imported from others increased drastically in 2 years given by 27% in 1988, and 65% in 1992, and slightly declined in 2000 to 42%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Import origins
  • Total import value
  • Trends in import values
  • Trade patterns
  • Source distribution
  • Import dependency
  • Fluctuations in trade
  • Economic implications
  • Demand and supply dynamics
  • International trade policies
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