What do you think could be important in tge council town should add. Formal letter write to Council Town.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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letter in response to your email to express my perspective and suggestions regarding potential improvements to the Town Council. I truly appreciate the opportunity to share my ideas, as I believe these improvements could significantly enhance the experience of all visitors.
Firstly
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, I would like to suggest that the authorities add more sports clubs and playground facilities for pupils.
This
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would help many children concentrate better and improve their mental health.
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, it would be highly beneficial if the Civic Committee provided a wide range of seating areas and libraries for the students.
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, a more convenient environment can be created for everyone.
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, I recommend that they organise extracurricular activities
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as food festivals and sports meets for one or more days.
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would not only boost personal development but
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help maintain mental well-being. Thank you for considering my opinion. I sincerely appreciate your time and hope that my feedback will be helpful. Yours faithfully, John

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content
Try to start with a short intro and then a clear list of ideas. Each idea fits in one paragraph.
structure
Use simple linking words to join ideas, like 'also', 'in addition', and 'however' where needed.
structure
Keep one main point in each paragraph. The letter uses 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' which is good, but add a short final note.
grammar
Check grammar and word choice. Some phrases sound a bit long for a simple letter.
tone
Polite and respectful tone.
content
Clear purpose and helpful ideas.
coherence
Good use of connect words.
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