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Children nowadays watch significantly more television than those in the past, which reduces their activity levels accordingly. Why is this the case? What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activüy among children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

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There is no denying that
due to
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tv
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This
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shaping
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the physical and mental development of
children
 and adolescents. There are growing concerns nowadays over the amount of date
spending
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 heir on watching television. In
this
 essay, I will try to explore
this
 issue and consider some measures to solve
this
 problem. It is worth noticing that modern heir can handle
tv
 and use youtube applications on
TV
 where they can watch viral videos. By spending multiple hours
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watching useless videos
children
 lost their interest in more healthy activities
such
 as football, basketball and other sports. First and foremost to overcome
this
 issue, adults should be
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role models for their offspring and reduce the
time
which
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they waste
on
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watching
TV
.
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 parents should track
quantity
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 of
time
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children
 wasting on watching
TV
. It is essential to limit views of
TV
 for
children
otherwise
 they will not acquire any
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another activity
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 except television and
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internet
.
For
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 my
children
 can play and use their smartphones
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 one hour per day,
as
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 they have many hobbies namely doing sports and playing chess. In conclusion,
it is clear that
 today's
children
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 prone to watch
TV
 owing to
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 of funny content.
However
 a lot of things depend on parents,
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 they should allocate more
time
 to spend
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 leisure
time
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playing with their
children
 and contribute
on
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 their nurture.
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 it is important to count how long
children
 watch
tv
 and limit
this
time
. With joint
effort
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 people can make good next generation.
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