The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following line graph illustrates the total of
books
read by males and females at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Overall
, it can be easily seen over the time trend between genders has changed, in view of the fact that men overcame women by the number of books
read.
To start with, in 2011, women had a slightly higher quantity of read reports, the difference is approximately 2000. Afterwards in 2012, the sum of books
studied steadily rose for both men and women, still
the contrast is quite high, twice . The following year, statistics for both genders equalised, to a significant number which is 10000. Add a comma
,still
Nevertheless
, the figure of books
males read overcame ladies, by 6000. Additionally
, the first drop happened in the chart in 2014 for females, it decreased to 8000.
In conclusion, overall
the data showed a positive trend for both gentlemen and ladies, however
the movement for females dramatically dropped after 2013.Add a comma
,however
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