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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given line graph indicates how many people
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visited
in
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3 different places in Europe from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
, the figures for the coast and mountains showed upward trends,
while
 a downward trend was the
figure
 for the lakes. In detail, 40
thousands
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 of tourists visited the coast in 1987, decreasing
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 around 35
thousands
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 over the next 5 years. From 1992 to 2007, the
figure
 increased gradually by 35
thousands
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, which peaked at about 75
thousands
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. In terms of the mountains, 20
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 of foreign people visited there in 1987. Over the next 10 years, the
figure
 was
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a slight
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 increase to 30
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, which was shown a mere change until 2007.
In contrast
, the
figure
 for mountains started from 10
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, which was the lowest
figure
. In 1997, 40
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 of overseas visitors visited there. The
figure
 increased significantly to approximately 75
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, which was peak in 2002. Interestingly, in 2007, the number of tourists decreased dramatically
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 50
thousands
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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