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Band 6

Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In recent years, it has been argued that, on the one hand, manufacturers and grocery stores should be responsible for the amount of packaging.
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, customers should avoid buying things with a lot of packaging.
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 essay discusses both points of view and
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 shows that I agree with the first point. If we are talking about a part of citizens
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 who say that manufacturing and grocery stores must handle
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 problem. One major reason for
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 view is that it does not matter how much customers buy packaging because it any created anyway, so it already causes an environmental problem.
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, if manufacturers start to regulate items with a large amount of
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 they will not appear in grocery and other stores,
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 why it will decrease sales for these types of products. In other cases, people say that everything depends on customers. In many cases, people already try not to buy items with
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 packaging to reduce the amount of pollution, which helps society and the planet, but not very efficient.
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, in recent years in Europe, citizens have started to care about recycling and eco-friendly materials. But it is not enough for the global mass of pollution. In conclusion, I believe that it is important that not only individuals make a step forward in reducing
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 packaging. Mostly, major companies, groceries, and factories replace or include less
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 in their goods. Which are likely to continue affecting our planet and make it a better living place.

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structure
Make your main point clear in the opening paragraph and keep to it in the rest of the essay.
coherence
Use clear linking words to join ideas, such as 'and', 'but', 'also', and 'for example'.
coherence
Put one big idea in each paragraph and start with a clear sentence.
language
Use simple words and short sentences to tell your point clearly.
content
The essay shows two views and a clear position.
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Conclusion repeats the view and ends the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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