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Detailed information regarding the dates Program schedule Enquire about cost and possible discounts for groups

#information #dates #program #schedule #enquire #cost #discounts #groups
Dear
Mr.
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Mr
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 Sharma, I am writing
this
 letter to ask for
further
 details associated with the upcoming webinar. My team and I
wants
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 to be a part of the web-based seminar.
Firstly
, please inform
that
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apply
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,
when
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us when
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this
 program will be held. So we can prepare
ourself
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ourselves
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 prior to the event. As I will be on annual vacation next month, it would not be possible for me to attend it if it is going to happen during that time.
Therefore
, it is important for me to know the exact date.
Secondly
, I would request you to provide the
time sheet
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timesheet
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 schedule for the seminar. It would be helpful for us
,
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apply
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 if it will be after
the
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working hours.
In addition
 to the above, there are several groups who are willing to participate and we are interested to know the registration fee.
Moreover
, what additional discounts would be possible
on
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for
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 multiple groups
.
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Your
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Yours
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 Sincerely,
Mohammd
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Mohammed
Mohammad
 Rizwan.
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