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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter 1)Correct the information in the article 2) Explain why it is important for the magazine to give the correct information 3) Suggestion what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear sir or madam, I am writing
this
 letter to let you know about the
article
 published in your international travel magazine contains
few
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 incorrect
information
 about the town, where I had born and brought up. The town mentioned
over
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in
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 the
article
 is Mysore,
it
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is famously know
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is famously known
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 as
heritage
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a heritage
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 city of Karnataka state
as well as
city
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the city
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 of palaces. But the author of the
article
 mentioned it as
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the city
a city
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a city
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city
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a city
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 of toys, which gives
false
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a false
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interpretation
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about
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of
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 the
place
. It is important to give
right
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the right
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information
 about the topics chosen for the
article
,
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 because people would misinterpret
about
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the
place
 and the same false
information
 would be
rendering
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 to the tourist who
are
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is
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 about the visit the
place
 and it is
also
 insulting about the
place
 by giving incorrect details without knowing and verifying the
information
. Being a popular international magazine referred by most
of
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the
tourist
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tourists
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 giving incorrect details would be not bearable. So, would you kindly make
a
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 necessary changes to the
concern
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article
along with
 apologies
over
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for
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 the mistake
occurred
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that occurred
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 regarding the incorrect
information
 in your next edition
.
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 Thank you for your consideration. And I would be waiting for your reply and changes over you’re next edition. You’re faithfully Vijay
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