Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?
Happiness
is a
main aspect and goal of anyone’s Correct article usage
the
life
, living just a way of life
shouldn’t be the lifestyle of any human being. Everyone should be feeling happiness
Replace the word
happy
the
way of lifestyle they choose over Change preposition
with the
the
other Correct article usage
apply
things
. Then
only we will be able to justify for
our Change preposition
apply
life
. In order to achieve this
few argue that having more money would lead to a happy life
compare
to other Change the form of the verb
compared
things
. Contrasting
, to Wrong verb form
Contrast
this
others
believe it’s not only the money which makes Add the comma(s)
,others
people
happy there are other things
that could bring joyful
Replace the word
joy
in
one’s Change preposition
to
life
like it could be a living creature or non-living
creature or it could Correct article usage
a non-living
also
be a
beautiful nature.
Correct article usage
apply
Firstly
, being rich
person has a lot Add an article
a rich
the rich
off
authority, dominance Replace the word
of
on
anything like influence over Change preposition
over
the
Correct article usage
apply
things
, freedom
of purchase without having any hesitation Correct word choice
and freedom
of
spending amount for Change preposition
in
things
. For
instance
Add a comma
,instance
big shot
Add a hyphen
big-shot
people
does
not think over twice Change the verb form
do
on
getting anything, Change preposition
about
instead
if they feel so to purchase it, they get it. In return makes them to
feel Change the verb form
apply
happiness
of getting whatever they wish for it.
Add an article
the happiness
Secondly
, we also
need to consider getting whatever we wish for does not make happiness
permanent in one’s life
, it is just a
temporary Remove the article
apply
happiness
for a shorter period of time
. Others find satisfaction in different ways by doing small things
or activities like donation
, spending Replace the word
donating
time
with loved one, engaging time
with favorite
activities like music, sports etc and Change the spelling
favourite
also
spending time
with nature bring happiness
in
Change preposition
to
people
face. For Change noun form
people's
an a
instance spending Correct article usage
apply
time
with nature or sitting next to our favorite
person and even doing small Change the spelling
favourite
things
which brings
togetherness between them Correct subject-verb agreement
bring
also
makes a person
Change noun form
person's
life
cheerful. These people
believe that apart from having richness they are other things
which can’t be procured by just having money.
To conclude
, the intention of anyone
Change noun form
anyone's
life
is to bring meaningful
for the Replace the word
meaning
life
by having happiness
that can be obtained either by having richness or by experiencing happiness
with other things
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