Some people spent most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reason for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

In recent decades it is been observed that

people

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are immigrating to a new

place

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from where they are born and brought up. But

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most of them

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make it up by not shifting to a far distance rather than living in close

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urban areas which gives ease of transportation to the

place

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where they are born. In

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essay

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we will be discussing

about

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the cause, advantages and disadvantages of living close to our born

place

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trend is seen in young professionals who intend to

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good

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career

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in the professional path.

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happens when they attend few educational degrees whose job opportunities demand them to shift to

new

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place

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where they have

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chance of getting employed. To

purse

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these jobs folks try to get

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at the nearby urban places or places which are very much close to the

place

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where they were born and

brought-up

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, few

people

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will be shifting from sub-urban or villages to urban areas where there is

better

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chance of getting

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education for their offspring to lead

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life in future without losing connection and affection to the

place

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where they are born.

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, pros and cons are present in their own ways. As an advantage there will be professional growth and recognition in the field of acquired degree

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, independence of living one’s own life will be acquired

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exploration

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various opportunities and mingling with

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other

people

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just like them can lead to

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, organized and

open minded

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lifestyle. Apart from these

pros

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there

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also

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cons which

needs

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to be looked at like

homesick

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which leads to

distract

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ourselves

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from having dedication towards the job which is giving bread and butter. These might

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loosen the connection between the family members,

cultures

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and cultures

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that we

were

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used

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from the child. Since we are looking into the new world where these values might not be values enough or

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their

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customs would be different.

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although

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we face cons in shifting to the nearby

place

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which can be bear by the advantages that we are looking at. As

people

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says

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everything comes at

cost

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, in order to gain something we have to come out of our comfort zone and explore ourselves to bring out the best version of our personality.

nlchiranth11

Feb 23, 2023

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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387 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Migration
Settlement
Hometown
Roots
Community
Emotional attachment
Sense of familiarity
Social network
Bond
Safety
Proximity
Support system
Heritage
Limited options
Risk aversion
Adaptability
Comfort zone
Unfamiliarity
Exploration
Adventurous spirit

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