Nowadays there is an increase in social problems involving young people because more parents spent time at work than with their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer

There is no denying the fact that the main impact of family

work

on their

kids

is arguable.

While

it is a commonly held belief that with the busy job

this

day, juveniles have become suffering as the social distance from their family increase. From my perspective, I strongly believe that the social gap between children and their

parents

increased as the family are spending more hours at the

work

rather than their

kids

. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain why I believe

this

and I will support my opinion with reasons and examples. On one hand, teenagers may suffer from the busy lifestyle of their family as most

parents

either

work

or study,

as

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a

result

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kids

are feeling lonely.

For example

, with the advancement of technology, most

parents

tend to

work

in their offices

as well as

do

an online meetings

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at

home

.

This

worsens the situation more as they will not have time to sit and talk with their

kids

about their problems.

Therefore

, the juveniles will feel lonely and isolated, and in some ,cases they will develop depression.

Thus

,

this

makes it clear that with the increase in the workload of family,

kids

getting severely affected.

Moreover

, workloads that made both

parents

stressed out would lack

family

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bond as

parents

will come from

work

feeling very exhausted and overwhelmed and they might sleep without even talking to their teenagers. To illustrate, a prestigious journal article published that 80% of youth who developed depression reported that they barely meet their

parents

even though they live in the same

home

.

This

juvenile will never feel loved as their family seem in

another worlds

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and have more priorities than their

kids

. Indeed, it becomes apparent that increasing job responsibilities may severely affect the children of the employees. In conclusion, most teenagers experienced loneliness and isolation as their families have excessive responsibility for their

work

and when they arrived at their apartment they ignore their

kid's

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kids'

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live

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lives

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.

My opinion

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, I consider that working families may harm their

kids

' lives as they spend time at

work

more than at

home

and even when they get

home

they feel tired and pay no attention to the youth.