IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #changes #house #prices #five #cities #summarise #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The provided bar chart illustrates the changes in mean house
prices
Use synonyms
 of five main cities in different countries from 1990 to 2020. The changes are compared with the average house cost in 1989.
Overall
Linking Words
, in the first half of the decade, two cities showed an increment
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
price
while
Linking Words
 the other countries showed decrement.
Besides
Linking Words
, in the second half of the period, only one city's housing
prices
Use synonyms
 were reduced
while
Linking Words
rest
Correct article usage
the rest
show examples
 reported a rise. Noticeably, Tokyo's price changes showed the largest change throughout the period In the period of 1990-1995, New York, accounted for
5
Correct article usage
a 5
show examples
% deduction in average house values, but increased by 5% after 1995.
Similarly
Linking Words
, London reported approximately -7% in the first 5 years and around +12% in the
last
Linking Words
 five years compared to 1989.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, Tokyo showed a decrement in the first and second halves of the decade which accounted for -7% and -5% respectively.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
, Madrid and Frankfurt
prices
Use synonyms
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
increased by roughly 2% and 3%
accordingly
Linking Words
, but
this
Linking Words
 trend deviated in the next five years; Madrid's resident
prices
Use synonyms
 rose closer to 4% and Frankfurt's
prices
Use synonyms
 reduced to 2%.
Submitted by dmdeemanthakasun on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 76%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words prices with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: