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In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live with any face to face contact with others.is it a positive or negative development in your opinion. To what extent do you support this development.

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Undoubtedly,it is true to say that in the technological
era
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 it is feasible to shop,work or communicate with individuals with the help of the
internet
 and survive without any one on one exposure with others.
although
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the mordern
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mordern
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modern
 world has enormous positive,
their
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 over usage have some
negetive
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negative
 side
also
. To commence with ,the
internet
 has
plethora
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 of benefits in order to make tasks easier than before for everyone.
Firstly
,
internet
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the internet
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 provide a
plateform
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platform
 for
masses
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the masses
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 to do their work
effortlessley
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effortlessly
 like booking tickets for travel or
movie
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a movie
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as well as
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table
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a table
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 for dinner etc.
secondly
internet
 not only helps people to
conveys
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 message instantly around the world but
also
 aids to interact with the life of other by using apps like
instagram
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Instagram
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 and
facebook
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Facebook
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.
Thus
internet
 has a vital role in
everyone
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everyone's
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 life. Despite
of
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the fact significant
positive
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positives
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 we discuss above ,
over rely
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 on
internet
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the internet
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 cause
threat
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in
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to
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 the lifestyle of the
inviduals
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individuals
.The reasons behind the notion
is
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 that
every one
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 wanted their work
on
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single
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a single
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use
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the use
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 of
internet
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the internet
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 and do not
want
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 do some extra effort as a
consequece
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consequence
 of obesity and
lazyness
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laziness
.
futhermore
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furthermore
,social media benefits only adults not
for
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teenagers.
while
,
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mostly
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 kids have
account
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an account
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 on social media
thesedays
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these days
 which distract them from their study.
therefore
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although
internet
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 is crucial
as well as
 it provides great
intrest
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interest
 but their limitation in some areas
is
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are
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also
 important.
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