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the charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate.

the charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate.
#show #temperature #rainfall #climate #mediterranean
The given graphs indicate the information regarding
temperature
 and
rainfall
 in
Equatorial
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the Equatorial
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climate
 and
Mediterranean
climate
.
Overall
, each category shows several features. The first graph represents the
temperature
 and
rainfall
 in
Equatorial
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the Equatorial
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climate
. As for
rainfall
,
rainfall
 records over 150mm every
months
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month
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 all year round.
In particular
,
rainfall
 records roughly 220mm, 250mm and 260mm in
Januray
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January
, November and December respectively.
Moreover
,
temperature
 illustrates that it is always hot,
the
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and the
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 average
of
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apply
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temperature
 remains stable
around
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at around
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 25celcius all year round. When it comes to the
Mediterranean
climate
, in the case of
rainfall
, it starts at roughly 170mm in January,
this
 figure decreases to approximately 60mm until March, and its figure fluctuates between about 10mm and 30mm between
Apil
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April
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 and October, after that, and
rainfall
 remarkedly increases to about 150mm from October to December. Pertaining to
temperature
, it starts
roughly
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at roughly
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 10celcius in
Janurary
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January
, and the figure gradually rises to about 30celcius until August, and the
temperature
 reached a peak at
this
 point, after August, the
temperature
 steadily declines to
aroud
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around
 10celcius in December. In
conclude
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conclusion
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, there are considerable differences between
Equatorial
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the Equatorial
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climate
 and
Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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climate
, It is interesting to note that the weather continuously
chages
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changes
 in
Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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climate
,
on the other hand
,
its one
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it
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 remains constant in
Equatorial
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the Equatorial
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climate
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, rainfall, climate, mediterranean, mm with synonyms.
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