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9.In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from the health problem as a result of eating too much junk food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax or this kind of food.

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Fast
food
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 has become a menace to the public having health problems in most countries. It has affected day-in and
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 for the younger ones who are craving
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these types of
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 but don't know the after-effects of it. So from a standpoint, it is important for the government to implement a higher tariff on
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 kind of junk
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. As
people
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 are getting so attached to these types of
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 it is necessary to apply some strict rules and regulations so that they feel the awareness of having them. Not only applying a strict law but
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 promoting health awareness videos 'on being afraid of having these types of junkies'.
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 research done by some of the most known universities and colleges, it seems that
people
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 nowadays have either Diabetes or Cholesterol, especially the
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 at adolescents age.
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 we must make them understand or have a clear eye-catching view of what will happen to them if they fall for these traps. As a solution, the community must adhere to the law and follow the footsteps of the
people
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 who take the right
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 and get their opinion on how they are living an ill-free , masculine and
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happy life. Another instance would be where our great-grandfathers or grandmothers took their meals during their time compared to now. It would have an enormous impact on the
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 living now compared to the oldies. Teenagers or middle-aged must follow these workarounds and avoid getting closer to having any type of health problems. In conclusion, fast
food
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 is a mere disease to the younger age and the public but living a life preventing them is the solution that we are craving. So my suggestion would be to apply a strict law and keep the community updating up-to-date on how to live in
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 disastrous society full of junk nowadays. Being able to live that life would prevent one from having any illnesses.
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