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The pie charts below show the data regarding the time people spend on smartphones and tablets, divided by category.

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The time consumption on smartphones and
tablets
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 divided
by
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 6 categories is depicted in the given two pie charts, the figure mentioned being in percentage.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the most popular service that people
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 on technology devices is playing games.
In addition
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, the
servive
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service
 which is the least used is reading news on phones and using
ultilities
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utilities
 on
tablets
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. The proportion of playing games on both smartphones and
tablets
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 is the
higest
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highest
, accounting for 35% and 57%
respecitively
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respectively
, followed by social networking with 29% and 15% respectively. The percentage of using
ultilities
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utilities
 on cellphones is significantly higher than that of
tablets
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, with 20% and 3% respectively. On smartphones, the number of people
lisening
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listening
 to music and watching videos (8%) is higher than the figure for reading news (3%),
while
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 those on
tablets
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 were 13% and 3%
respecitively
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respectively
.
Finally
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, only 5%
on
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of
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 phones and 8%
on
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of
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a tablet
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tablet
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 that people
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 for others.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tablets with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital devices
  • Proportion
  • Communication
  • Entertainment
  • Work-related tasks
  • Productivity
  • Miscellaneous activities
  • Time distribution
  • Prevalence
  • Dedicate
  • Allocate
  • Examine
  • Observation
  • Impact
  • Time management
  • Edit documents
  • Professional communication
  • Personal finance management
  • Streaming services
  • Social media platforms
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