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do you agree or disagree with the following statement it is a waste of money for governments fo fund space travel of space exploration

#waste #money #governments #fo #fund #space #travel #exploration
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traveling
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 to
space
is
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 a
wastge
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waste
wastage
 of time. On the other side, others believed that it is a good way to
discovering
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 the universe. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 statement. I will explain my viewpoints in detail in the ensuing paragraph. Discovering
space
 is crucial for developing country,
for example
, Nasa is a specific company in The US, that make many journeys to
space
, Which help them in
exploreing
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exploring
 what is going on out
of
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the earth,
such
 as
the
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whether
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weather
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 will be raining heavily or slowly, in earlier today.
Moreover
, Nasa, use
technology
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 of GPS,
this
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 will detect any point clearly from
far
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a far
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 distance,
such
 as if they want to see any information about
criminal
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 they can find him easily by
detect
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 his location in a few seconds.
As a result
, it is important to fund
on
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this
 for developing and exploring in next future, which can make
life
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a life
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 for
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a human
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human
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humans
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 more
easily
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.
On the other hand
, some
persons
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people
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 consider
that is
 a
wastage
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waste
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 of
money
,
bacause
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because
 of the high cost.
for instance
, it would be better to spend
money
 on
the
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education or
puplic
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public
 health rather than exploring
space
, which will cost the institute and,
hence
, affects
livelihood
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the livelihood
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 of people.
To conclude
, Without spending
money
 to explore
space
,
the
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progress will stop,
hence
, we have to spend more
money
 to see and discover the
univere
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universe
.
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