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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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There is no doubt that these days most of our youth use self-phones to do everything,
such
 as calling or texting their friends and family. The question is, can they live on the apps to communicate or do they need to see each other? In
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essay I will discuss both views and my opinion will be given. In terms of the positive side to having social media apps on your child's phone is to talk with his friends and play with them without going on the street or the park all the time. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is some of the sites are designed to provide tracer from the app.
Also
, some sites let the parents control their accounts. Or, if he is not a people person and wants to make new friends, he can do so.
Nevertheless
, a significant number of applications spread among youngsters.
However
, some people strongly believe there is a drawback to letting young people use
this
 kind of app.
Firstly
, maybe they will contact an impolite person. Or getting immoral videos.
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