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the charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate.

#show #temperature #rainfall #climate #mediterranean
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The charts compare the
amount
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 of
temperature
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 and
rainfall
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 in the Equatorial
climate
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 and
Mediterranean
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climate
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 , which is measured in
degree
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degrees
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Celsius
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 and
mile
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a mile
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metre
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metres
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. In general , the Equatorial
climate
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 accounted
a
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significant
amount
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 of
rainfall
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 in all the months and
as a result
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 ,
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temperature
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the temperature
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 was very low .
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 , for the
Mediterranean
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climate
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 it was the opposite. To be specific , January , November and December
was
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 the months that accounted for
most
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the most
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amount
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 of
rainfall
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 in
Equatorial
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the Equatorial
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climate
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 , it was 270cu
mm
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 in January , 250cu
mm
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 (November) and 260cu
mm
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 in December ; which was the highest
rainfall
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 reported for Equatorial
climate
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. Interestingly ,the same trend can be seen for
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Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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climate
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 ;
however
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 the
amount
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 of
rainfall
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 for those months
were
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was
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 low , which constituted 170
cu
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mm
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 , 99cu
mm
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 ,
150cu
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and 150cu
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mm
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 . As consequence , the
temperature
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 in
Equatorial
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the Equatorial
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climate
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 was stable , which was around 25
degrees
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Celsius
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through out
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throughout
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 the year.
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Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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climate
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 , it was approximately 150
degrees
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Celsius
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 in January but after February the
temperature
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 increased dramatically and reached a peak of 300
degrees
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Celsius
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 in August
then
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 it decreased to 150
degrees
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Celsius
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 in December.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, temperature, rainfall, climate, mediterranean, celsius, cu, mm, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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