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the charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate.

#show #temperature #rainfall #climate #mediterranean
The charts compare the
amount
 of
temperature
 and
rainfall
 in the Equatorial
climate
 and
Mediterranean
climate
 , which is measured in
degree
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degrees
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Celsius
 and
mile
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a mile
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metre
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metres
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. In general , the Equatorial
climate
 accounted
a
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for a
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significant
amount
 of
rainfall
 in all the months and
as a result
 ,
temperature
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the temperature
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 was very low .
Whereas
 , for the
Mediterranean
climate
 it was the opposite. To be specific , January , November and December
was
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were
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 the months that accounted for
most
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the most
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amount
 of
rainfall
 in
Equatorial
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the Equatorial
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climate
 , it was 270cu
mm
 in January , 250cu
mm
 (November) and 260cu
mm
 in December ; which was the highest
rainfall
 reported for Equatorial
climate
. Interestingly ,the same trend can be seen for
Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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climate
 ;
however
 the
amount
 of
rainfall
 for those months
were
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was
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 low , which constituted 170
cu
mm
 , 99cu
mm
 ,
150cu
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and 150cu
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mm
 . As consequence , the
temperature
 in
Equatorial
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the Equatorial
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climate
 was stable , which was around 25
degrees
Celsius
through out
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throughout
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 the year.
While
 for
Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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climate
 , it was approximately 150
degrees
Celsius
 in January but after February the
temperature
 increased dramatically and reached a peak of 300
degrees
Celsius
 in August
then
 it decreased to 150
degrees
Celsius
 in December.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, temperature, rainfall, climate, mediterranean, celsius, cu, mm, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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