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Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#politicians’ #lives #newspapers
People think that the secret life details of political leaders should not be released in
news
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. I totally disagree, as they are role models for society,
however
, some personal space is everybody's right.
Considering one
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One
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 of the reasons behind the publications of intimate life stories of political figures is their role as arbiters in ordinary man’s life. They think they are the best chosen among them
,
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and, therefore
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therefore
, heroes of the nation.
For example
, Barack Obama was frequently caught by the media
while
 he was out of his office and was admired for his humbled and behaviour with his family, in routine activities and interactions. He never took advantage of being President of the country
Moreover
, another reason for transparency is that society thinks that
this
 can prevent
such
 personalities from corruption, briberies and immoralities being afraid of always into the limelight.
For instance
, a bunch of political parties have made secret assets in Pakistan from money illegally that a poor had paid from his limited income.
Consequently
, these governmental personalities have lost trust in them
On the other hand
, having privacy is every human being's right and politics-related people
also
 deserve that.
Therefore
, they should be publicised for their work as leaders or services not what they do in their free time. In conclusion, I believe the opposite view of the statement that there should be broadcasting of private activities of political folks
due to
 the fact they can be an inspiration for the youth,
as well as
such
 publications make things more realistic and lucid but again
this
 should have certain limits.
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task response
Ensure that your essay directly addresses the prompt and presents a clear opinion. Discuss both sides of the issue, offering balanced arguments for and against the publication of private details of political leaders.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrusion
  • accountability
  • transparency
  • sensationalism
  • privacy
  • public interest
  • collateral damage
  • precedent
  • responsible journalism
  • exploitation
  • democratic processes
  • media culture
  • balance
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