Some people claim that life in a big cities is dangerous for health. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The problem of whether or not big
cities
are bad for health sparked a heated debate. While
some argue that megapolises don't have
a danger to humanity, I contend that those Verb problem
pose
cities
have a huge impact on our organisms and lifestyle.
There are two main reasons why living in big cities
is irrelevant to society. One of them is that megapolises establish a big
number of factories and plants. Correct word choice
large
This
phenomenon has a negative influence on our lungs and skin. Another cogent reason is products which are sold in supermarkets are not healthy and are sometimes dangerous for consuming
. Big Replace the word
consumption
cities
don't have an opportunity to grow up fresh vegetables and fruits and because of that they should make artificial products with the addiction to drugs. For instance
, according to
the statics
of the Worldwide Health Community seventy per cent of city dwellers die from lung cancer.
I personally believe that living in the countryside and suburbs are relatively positive for several reasons with the one being nature and clean air. Correct your spelling
statistics
In addition
, existence in villages is more pleasant. Also
, products such
as vegetables and fruits are more affordable in these places. Countrysides have great conditions for growing up
a crop.
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apply
To conclude
, dwelling in big cities
would lead to a negative impact on health, especially in factories and plants which make the air dirty and dangerous. However
, recognizing the importance of the big
number of diseases it is advisable to encourage the government to be attentive and serious about Correct word choice
large
this
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Address the task more directly by providing a balanced discussion of both views and clearly expressing your opinion. Provide relevant and specific examples to support your points.