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Band 6.5

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In you letter - suggest how you could help her in her home - say why you would like to do her home - explain when you will and will not be available

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 week, I saw the advertisement in
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our town’s newspaper about you are seeking someone to help you. I am writing
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 email to provide my assistance and to inform details of my skills. First of all, I am skilled at various household tasks,
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 as laundry and cooking,
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 I have a lot of diverse experiences in part-time jobs. Particularly, I am talented at cooking and dishwashing, because currently I am working in a restaurant. When I heard that you were experiencing inconvenience
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 the broken dishwasher, I felt deeply sorry and wanted to offer my assistance. Unfortunately, I am unable to assist you all day. I can only
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 in the daytime on weekdays.
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 is because, in the afternoons, I have to go
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downtown to work. If you want to ask
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 information, feel free to contact me. Yours sincerely, Minwoo Chun.

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Ensure to maintain proper grammatical structures, especially with verb tenses and articles. For example, use 'the town’s newspaper' instead of 'the our town’s newspaper' and 'to help you' should be 'to help you out'.
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Use clear and concise language for smoother readability. For instance, revise 'due to I have a lot of diverse experiences in part-time jobs' to 'due to my diverse experiences in part-time jobs'.
coherence cohesion
Consider structuring your letter with clearer transitions between paragraphs. This will enhance the overall logical flow.
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You clearly addressed all the points in the prompt. Good job on suggesting how you could help, why you are interested, and when you are available.
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The tone of your letter is appropriate and polite, which is suitable for the task.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are correctly formatted and contribute well to the formal tone of the letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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