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Do you believe that scientific experimentation on animals is justified? Are there any alternatives to animal experimentation?

#experimentation #animals #alternatives
In my point of view experimentation on
animals
 is bad
however
, In important discoveries can be made from
animals
.
Animals
also
 have life.
Animals
 need to take extra care When
animals
 are used for the dossier. We are going through the worst pandemic. Scientists are still searching for vaccines to come out of
this
 pandemic. In
this
 ,situation scientists can't directly do vaccine
experiments
 on the human body. so the alternative option is
animals
. In my opinion,
experiments
 conducted on
animals
 might kill them or they will suffer till the
last
 breath.
hence
 after conducting the experiment, need to take care of the
animals
instead
 of killing them or letting them go. In the current ,situation I don't see any alternatives to conduct the
experiments
. Doing
experiments
 on trees or any other plants is not helpful. The reaction of
an experiment
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experiment experiments
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experiments
 can be only seen on the human body or
animals
. Compare to
animals
, the human body has high value.
on the other hand
, new developments done in medical science,
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 it has to be made sure
that
is
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 safe for use. As testing of
such
 is mandatory.
however
, doing
experiments
 directly on humans or
animals
 is unethical. It is not that we need to stop experimenting with new developments
instead
 we should look for an alternative solution like developing artificial software which will provide us with the perfect human subject on the computer. In conclusion, change is a necessary part of our life, in order to survive and keep experimenting with new things.
However
, we must ensure no harm is done to any animal.
This
 can
also
 be done using the latest technology.
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