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Given the rise in criminal activities across the world, many people believe that long jail term is the only solution to this problem. Others, however, think that it is re-education and rehabilitation that holds the key to solving this problem. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Many countries are facing several issues and the increasing
crime
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 rate is one of them. A section of society believes that life imprisonment is the best solution for
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 issue,
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, others opine that proper education and rehabilitation are the proper solutions to fix the issue. In my opinion, punishment should be decided not only based on the
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 on other factors as well
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 as mental condition. To commence with, criminals who are terrorists and serial killers should be treated with paramount precaution and not allowed to stay in society. Because their ultimate motivation is to kill
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 which is very dangerous for humankind.
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, their only intention is to spread threats across the world and we cannot provide an education to them as they are already being brainwashed.
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, there is no point in treating them as normal criminals and rather sending them behind the bars or announcing capital punishment.
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, there are many
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 who are drug addicted and suffering from mental issues because of the bad environment. These
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 mostly commit crimes because they always need all these drugs at any cost.
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, through rehabilitation sessions, we can treat them and cure their issues and give them a second chance to live in society.
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, individuals who are extremely poor commit crimes to meet their basic needs. As a solution, by providing education and livelihood we can deal with the issue and reduce the
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 rate.
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, based on the impact of the
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 and other factors punishment should be declared. the
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 who are spreading terror should not be allowed live freely, and others who are mentally unstable should be given one more chance to make themselves better.
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