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These days in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers particulary in secondry school. What are the reasons for this and how could the problem be solved.

#countries #people #teachers #particulary #secondry #school
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Teaching
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 is the best occupation in the world as they build children's
future
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. It is a respected job
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, nowadays
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numerous countries face
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 problem lacking
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teachers
 in secondary school , people do not want to be specialised in teaching
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 ,well there are several facts behind it and I give a brief solution to overcome
this
 complication in the essay. First and foremost, there
are
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 no
such
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teachers
due to
 the trend of technology everyone should choose IT sectors and the number of
teachers
 declined drastically.
Secondly
, the main reason
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 it is
low
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 salaries provide to young
teachers
along with
 heavy workloads so they do not manage
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 time for others person things . As result,
teachers
 are demolished day by day for, example, in Japanese University resulted that more than educated people choose other opportunities
although
,
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inconvenience
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 in
teaching
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line
.
Therfore
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Therefore
, some
teachers
 are
fasturated
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frustrated
 That
students
 do not follow obeys rules and make
anarchary
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anarchy
.
This
,
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 would be difficult for
teacher
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a teacher
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 to control the situation.
Everylock
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Every lock
 has a key, there are
possible
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approach
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 to bring change in society government have a provide sufficient salaries and increase their importance among
community
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 so that more and more
students
 should dream to follow
teaching
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line
.For ,instance, is consider that
,
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teachers
 face work overload in private
instituties
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institutions
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 it would be solved by
provide
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convinence
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convenience
 and
reliableness
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 for them.
Thus
, local authorities need to look part in it , organing various create camps so that
students
 and
teachers
 build
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relationship
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relationships
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 and respect their elders .
last
 but not least government took strict action
among
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who
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those who
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 do not obey rules and restrict
to
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them . For, instance, in many developed countries collect fines
students
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 breaking laws to irritate
teachers
. In conclusion, there are some reasons why
teachers
 do not
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 in secondary schooling .
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,
this
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 problems can
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beacuse
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because
of
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their
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salaries ,
declined
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declining
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 workload and
provide
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providing
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the
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facilities to
improved
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improve
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 the
teachers
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teacher's
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 life .
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