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Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

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As the economy is advancing by leaps and bounds, 
people
 attach great importance to jobs and their life. Under
this
 circumstance, the
fact
 that
people
 tend to do jobs that they are not really into or they have no talent for has been thrown into sharp focus.
Hence
, it is imperative to analyze the reasons behind
this
 phenomenon and the potential effects brought about by
this
 growing trend. The causes of
this
 phenomenon are manifold.
However
, in
this
 essay, I am going to analyze one main reason. It is all about monetary issues. In
fact
, many studies have shown that
although
 it is invisible, there are some kinds of careers which involve artistic abilities that if
people
 try to do, they could not earn enough money for their life
such
 as artists or designers.
For example
, from my own experiences, there were so many well-known painters in the world who became famous just after they passed away. Their artworks became exorbitant but the
fact
 is they could not have
as well as
 use that money.
This
 example is an illustration of the
fact
 that
people
 these days have to find a job with a high income to provide for their life,
instead
 of following their dream. Regarding potential influences,
this
 trend is likely to cause snowball effects. It is predicted that there would be a lack of talents who are good at drawing, painting, designing, and so on.
Subsequently
,
precious
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 cultures of each country are going to lose someday.
Besides
, another impact could be that
people
 are more likely to work without any happiness since they just do it
due to
 money problems.
As a result
, the number of
people
 who quit their jobs is expected to increase, and that leads to the difficulties that every company has to face. In conclusion, as the culprits and impacts have been discussed above, I believe that
this
 crisis can be resolved if the government and the relevant parties figure out some feasible remedies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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