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Do you think extra curricular activities are important in a students life ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples?

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the
two
 maps
illustartes
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illustrates
illustrate
city
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the city
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hospitad
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hospital
 and the
road
 that leads to it in 2007 and 2010.
overall
, there are not many changes
exept
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except
 a few updates where the
park
 has been
seperated
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separated
to
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into
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two
 parks . one for the staff and another for the
publics
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public
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.
To Begin
, in 2010
two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 have
beed
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been
 added to the hospital
road
 ,
whereas
 in 2007 there were not one,
additionally
, in 2010 there is a new entrance to the ring
road
 from the east side which leads to a public car
park
.
moreover
, the bus stop has been converted to a bus station on the
weast
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west
east
 side of the hospital
road
 ,
while
 the
park
 on the east was specialised
to
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for
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 staff only .
furthermore
,
two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 were added to the hospital
roud
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road
.
bothe
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both
 of them have access to
bus
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the bus
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 station.
finally
, the entrance from the
park
 on the east has
remain
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remained
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 the same.
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