Countries with long working days are more successful economically, but there are some negative social consequences.  To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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time
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working and
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a more prosperous
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having a healthy body and
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realationship
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relationship
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with family. I strongly agree, that spending most of the
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working has a tremendous effect on
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's
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. Other
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countries
choose to spend most of their
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on
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working without realizing the drawbacks.
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, for others working hard means having a good
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the reason
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their motivation.
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should consider that money is not everything and health is wealth.
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, having s balance
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is the ultimate goal.
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, if a person
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sick sometimes the money is not enough to shoulder all the expenses. Apart from that,
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should not dwell much of their
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working
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spend it with their families. For others, no matter how wealthy is the person without having a
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one's
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it seems their
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is empty. Human
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exist in many factors
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as love, companionship and a sense of belongingness.
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neglecting
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their families despite
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their wealth and capabilities to purchase
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material things are really not happy in
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. In conclusion,
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working long hours would help the
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progress.
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,
healthy
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body and having
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happy
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is
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more important. I believe
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a
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life
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key to
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success
in all nations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • correlation
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • detrimental
  • stress levels
  • strain
  • work-life balance
  • emerging economies
  • unsustainable growth
  • social unrest
  • productivity tools
  • government policies
  • social well-being
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