More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

Large cities are seen as places of
opportunities
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;
however
,
life
in urban areas can be dramatically difficult for inhabitants.
Therefore
,
government
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should improve city
life
for migrants. In subsequent paragraphs,
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essay shall see my explanations of some drawbacks. There are several reasons why
life
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in a city is difficult.
Firstly
, high unemployment observed in large cities and
people
migration leads to more inactive
people
.
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, in Almaty population is
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about 1.5
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million
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of
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people
,
after
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migration from rural areas,
accordingly
unemployment increased.
Secondly
, it is important to care about food and drink. It requires hard work and money to feed all population in mega-polis.
For instance
, Hong Kong is a large city and not all
people
can afford to live there. So,
government
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should solve
this
problem and improve urban
life
for everyone. Nowadays, a lot of
people
are migrating to populated areas and
ministry
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should help them in search of a better
life
. One of the most effective ways is to attract transnational companies like
McDonalds
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, Apple and Starbucks. It can help to find jobs for inhabitants and
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it is beneficial for companies as a new income. To illustrate
this
, when Kazakhstan took independence, they invite global businesses like Samsung to employ
people
.
Furthermore
,
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politics should reduce traffic jams and increase the use of public
transports
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.
For instance
, they can make special roads for buses and a lot of
people
start to use bus lines.
To conclude
, living in
a large cities
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has some drawbacks,
however
, I believe that government should improve the quality of urban
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for everyone by
methods
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mentioned above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Metropolis
  • Rapid urban growth
  • Megacity
  • Urban sprawl
  • Housing affordability
  • Infrastructure development
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Green spaces
  • Job market
  • Social cohesion
  • Community engagement
  • Safety measures
  • Crime prevention
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