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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for a child having a larger number of toys?

#parents #children #toys #child
Almost all people take
a
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pleasure
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 getting something to play with in their childhood. Different
type
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and plenty amount of
toys
 are bought
to
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the child
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child
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 by
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number
 of
parents
 . I will write
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both advantages and disadvantages of owning
huge
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number
 of playthings . Generally,
toys
made
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 only for playing , and time by
time
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 they
evaluated
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 and nowadays they have many advantages like improving Intellectual quotient and individual skills . In
this
case
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 children
played
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 games can own a significant benefit in developing
of
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their intellect . One clear example is
construction
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 game named
as
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“Lego”.
This
 game upgrades children’s IQ and construction
skill
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,
subsequently
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 in the future
he
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 could become
professional
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constructor
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constructors
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 or
engineer
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.
In
addition
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toys
 can solve
global
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the global
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 (worldwide )
problem
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problems
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, exactly addiction to phones . Because people , who don’t play and use mobiles in childhood , are less
depend
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 on their
phone
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phones
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. In common , getting a large
number
 of
toys
also
 has negative impacts and disadvantages
to
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 both children and their
parents
 .
Firstly
 , nowadays playthings for kids cost a lot of money ,
that is
hardly
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 earned by their
parents
 . In
generally
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 speaking , it doesn’t worth spent money for buying
plenty
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number
 of
toys
. And there is another disadvantage , precisely danger
for
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 kid’s health . Buying a large
number
 of
toys
do
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parents
 careless ,
whereas
 their child can get
maim
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from
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 sharp
toys
 or shallow pony playthings
Overall
 , in my opinion
advantages
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 of buying
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large amount of
toys
 outweigh its drawbacks , unless there are disadvantages like
danger
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a danger
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 to health and expensive cost .
Submitted by Deadline 8th April IELTS on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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