Task 1: The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006.

The chart compares the proportion of
women
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delivered
diverted
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who divered
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divered
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delivered
their child for the
first
time in
term
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terms
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of age groups in Australia in
seperate
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separate
3
years
( 1966, 1986 and 2006)
Overall
, it can be seen clearly that the percentage of
women
who gave birth to their
first
child witnessed a gradual increase at all ages. One notable trend was that
while
there was a fall in the proportion of
first
-time mothers aged 30 or under, the opposite was true for the figure of
women
whose
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apply
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aged over 30. In 1966, the majority of
women
at
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over 60% were aged between 20 and 24
years
old when
dilivering
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delivering
their
first
child, compared to 35% who were young
mother
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mothers
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, aged
at
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under 19. After 40
years
, these figures dropped sharply to around 34% and 15% , respectively. The 25-30 age group saw a slightly different pattern, with a rise of about 15% in the
first
20
years
, followed by a decline of nearly 10% twenty
years
later , down to just over 40 %. Turning to the remaining age categories, the proportions of 30-34s and 34-39s who were
first
-time mothers experienced dramatic increases over the
40-year-period
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40-year period
, from approximately 13% to 47% and from 8% to 30%, respectively. The figures for
women
aged 40 or over remained relatively stable at around 2% and 4% during the same period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, first, years with synonyms.
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