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Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they are visiting? Do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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Adapting and accepting the
culture
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 of the
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country
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people
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 are topics of
debates
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. Some believe that it is important to
respect
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 and understand the local traditions,
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 others think that
visitors
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 could do anything. In my opinion,
people
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 should try to adapt to the
culture
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 of the
country
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 they are visiting. When visiting a foreign
country
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, it is important to value and
respect
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 the local traditions. It shows
respect
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 to the local
people
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, and it
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 allows
visitors
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 to learn more about the history of
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country
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. Adapting to the local
culture
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 can help
visitors
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 blend in and feel more comfortable. It
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 helps to explore local
people
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 and form friends.
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, it is important to know that adapting to the local
culture
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 does not mean forgetting own
culture
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.
Visitors
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 can still keep their values
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 respecting the local customs. In conclusion, I believe that adapting and accepting the
culture
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 of the
country
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people
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 will visit is important. It shows
respect
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of
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for
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 the local
people
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.
However
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, it is
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 important to keep
own
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your own
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 values
while
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 respecting local traditions.
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