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Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they are visiting? Do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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Adapting and accepting the
culture
 of the
country
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country's
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people
 are topics of
debates
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debate
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. Some believe that it is important to
respect
 and understand the local traditions,
while
 others think that
visitors
 could do anything. In my opinion,
people
 should try to adapt to the
culture
 of the
country
 they are visiting. When visiting a foreign
country
, it is important to value and
respect
 the local traditions. It shows
respect
 to the local
people
, and it
also
 allows
visitors
 to learn more about the history of
this
country
. Adapting to the local
culture
 can help
visitors
 blend in and feel more comfortable. It
also
 helps to explore local
people
 and form friends.
However
, it is important to know that adapting to the local
culture
 does not mean forgetting own
culture
.
Visitors
 can still keep their values
while
 respecting the local customs. In conclusion, I believe that adapting and accepting the
culture
 of the
country
people
 will visit is important. It shows
respect
of
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for
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 the local
people
.
However
, it is
also
 important to keep
own
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your own
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 values
while
 respecting local traditions.
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