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Many people today are worried about "cybercrime" such as hacking and identity theft. What problems does "cybercrime" cause, and what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and business to take?

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There is no denying the fact that the main impact of cybercrime is arguable.
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 a commonly held belief is that
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 attacks can threaten
individuals
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' life. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss some of the problems caused by
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-attacks and suggest some solutions for
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 problem.
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Cyber
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The cyber
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 attack causes multiple problems.
First,
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cyber
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 attacks may cause more harm to
individuals
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 and big companies.
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, hackers started to attack important institutions
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 as banks and health ministries and they steal important
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 which may cause disastrous effects on the
country
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. To illustrate, we hear a lot about people who get stolen by certain
individuals
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 online as most of them leave abroad and call
individuals
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 from outside the
country
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 and fool them that they can provide them with a service, but in the
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end people got stolen. Those hackers attack the safety and security of
individuals
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 and the institution and mostly want money and important
information
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.
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,
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 stealing sensitive
country
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information
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 can cause financial loss for the
country
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as well as
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 they might fight the
country
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 through
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 important
information
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.
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, the menace of
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a cyber attack
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 attacks can be fought. Education is the main way to tackle
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 issue. People need to be aware of the effects so they can avoid the problem.
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,
individuals
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 should buy strong software that prevents
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crime
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 to happen.
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, they should be careful about their passwords and username, they should not provide
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 personal
information
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 to anyone.
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, the government could
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 use infomercials to educate their citizens.
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 is a good approach because it can alert all citizens about the negative aspects of providing anyone with personal
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. In conclusion, cybercrime has become dangerous and the sense of privacy has been lost.
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, the authority must help in preventing
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 crimes by educating their citizens.
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