some people think that parents should teach their children to be a good member of society whereas other believe that school should teach them. discuss both sides and give your opinion

Some people believed that it is
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parent's
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duty to teach
thier
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their
kids to be
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good
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members
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of
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the community
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while
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argue that
children
should learn it at school. The reasons that support both views will be presented in the essay. It is true that parents
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an
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role in
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lives.
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children
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action and thinking came from things that
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their father
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and mother
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them.
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said
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, the kid will act like them.
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, some people argue that
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will be
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factor for
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where students who
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from
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family stay together.
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from
the
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different
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. that
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reason
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the reason
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why
school
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schools
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should teach
children
about
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to stay with each other
while
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children
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