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Shopping used to be a daily household chore. These days a lot of people consider it as a recreation. At what scope do you believe this is a practical movement?

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In the past, shopping was considered
as
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a
merely
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 household chore.
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, the idea
as to
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 shopping has changed into a recreational way. Nowadays, a lot of
people
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 enjoyed shopping
itself
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. Some
people
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believes
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 that
this
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movement
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are
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is
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 detrimental because it
trigger
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 meaningless expenses.
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, I believe that the
movement
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 regarding shopping is pretty practical for some reasons.
Firs
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 of all, in the aspect of
individual
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the individual
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, the changed idea about shopping reduces
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the stresses
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stresses
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stress
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 of
people
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. To maintain our lives properly, purchasing any
kinds
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 of
commodity
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a commodity
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 is necessary. It has been inevitable since human beings started to live together and exchange
items
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. When
people
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 deemed shopping as a mere daily household chore, it was just one of the boring tasks.
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,
the
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modern
people
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 started to enjoy these boring tasks as
a
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recreational
activity
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activities
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. It doesn’t only reduce a feeling of
burdensome
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, but
also
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release
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releases
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 stress coming from daily life.

With that being said, the
movement
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 regarding shopping
also
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 brings economical benefits. Since
people
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 started to consider shopping as a kind of recreational activity, more
items
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 in the markets have been purchased for
the
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recreational reason. It has resulted in the
developments
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development
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 of
market
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the market
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, which is closely related to the growth of
economy
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the economy
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.
For example
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,
people
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 spend money on a certain item which is not essential for their lives, but just to feel satisfaction from purchasing something. It is obvious that current generations spend more money on
items
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 that they actually don’t need. It can be considered
waste
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 of money,
on the other hand
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, currency circulation can contribute to the growth of
economy
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the economy
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.
To sum up
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, the current
movement
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 about shopping
into
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a
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recreation is practical and beneficial for individuals and society. It reduces stress which is coming from a daily household shore. At the same time, it encourages
people
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 to purchase more
items
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 in the markets, which can contribute to
the
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economic growth. For
these reason
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 aforementioned, I insist that the charged idea
about
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 shopping is practical and inevitable.

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