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The maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

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The maps illustrate the main changes which have taken place on an island, before and after the building of some tourist facilities.
Overall
, there was before the abandoned island without any buildings and infrastructure, after that there were built a lot of housing with relevant tourist facilities
along with
 a move away from
neglected
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 area to
tourist
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a tourist
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 one.
Firstly
, there was constructed a pier, which allow
to
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moor boats. The pier was connected with a main roundabout in the middle
of
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which was erected
a
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as a
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reception. On the left side of the main roundabout exists
an
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another roundabout
which
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connected
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with
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beach
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a beach
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 and bungalows by footpath. There
also
were
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introduced
some
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infrastructure
such
 as
vehicle
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a vehicle
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track
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 from
pier
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the pier
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 to another building. Another noticeable change is that were introduced more
the
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bungalows to the east of the island,
however
, some lands were not expanded to the east.
Additionally
, all trees remained
on
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 the same place without cutting down.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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