Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
There are various factors that affect how
people
live throughout their life
. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
While
some people
believe that individuals' cultures
are primarily influenced by a country of origin, others believe that they have a minor effect on their beliefs and acts. I generally agree with the former view for the following reasons.
On one hand, it is an undeniable fact that native cultures
have a direct impact on individual thoughts and acts as they are
embedded deeply with them since their childhood. Wrong verb form
have been
For example
, many Japanese people
tend to consume more rice and fish on daily
basis because of the huge influence of its tradition. Correct article usage
a daily
In addition
, diligent attitudes can be seen among many Japanese students and workers as they are raised in a country where people
put more emphasis on hard work in every aspect of life
. In other words
, deeply adapting to the unique lifestyle of the native country makes it more difficult for them to alter their habits.
On the other hand
, in spite of the incredible impacts of the traditional culture on individuals, the growing trend of globalization reduces its significance. Indeed, people
living today gain more interaction with different cultures
thanks to the rapid advance of technology and transportation. As a result
, various ideas and materials such
as food, music and clothing are frequently imported from foreign nations. This
allows different styles of living to be provided to facilitate their everyday life
. Therefore
, the acts and beliefs of individuals are not necessarily tied to their original countries as they gain more diverse cultural experiences.
In conclusion, the original culture has had a definite and continuous effect on the individual lifestyle throughout their life
. However
, the current flow of international cultures
makes their lives more diverse.Submitted by mizuho_kondo117 on
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