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The table below gives information about the value of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and re-porting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the value of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and re-porting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the export value of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to Japan,
China
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,
Mexico
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,
Russia
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 and Saudi Arabia in 2010, 2011 and 2012.
Overall
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, among the five mentioned countries, Japan had the highest value in 2010, 2011 and 2012
while
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 Saudi Arabia was New Zealand's least potential
market
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. Meanwhile,
China
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 and
Russia
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 gradually increased
whereas
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Mexico
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 had fluctuating numbers in each three mentioned years.
To begin
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 with, Japan had an upward trend from $271.100.000 in 2010 to $287.400.000 and hit a peak of over $325.000.000 in 2012.
In contrast
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, Saudi Arabia gradually decreased from
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 to
year
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. Particularly in 2010, the summary value of exports from New Zealand peaked at nearly $300.000, precisely $290.000 and dramatically fell down by $184.000 in 2011 and after a
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, it decreased to $82.000.
According to
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 the given data, it is apparent that the three remaining countries had no significant changes. Specifically, there were upward trends in
China
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 and
Russia
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whereas
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Mexico
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 had a decrease between 2010 and 2011, after a
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 it slightly increased.
China
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 and
Russia
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 reached respectively $74.900.000 and $968.000 before going upward to $84.800.000 and $1.585.000,
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 continuously increasing to $94.000.000 and $2.404.000.
China
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 became the second largest
market
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while
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Russia
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 was the fourth
market
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 among the five countries.
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Mexico
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's figures increased and decreased unevenly (dropping over $3.500.000 between 2010 and 2011,
then
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 marginally growing to $3.300.000 in 2012),
this
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 country was the third potential
market
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, mexico, russia, market, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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