You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter •Describe what you enjoyed about the course. •Say how much cooking you've done since the course. •Suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter to express my satisfaction regarding a culinary class that was completed at your institute
last
month. In
this
letter, I will provide valuable feedback and share my experience related to the
course
.
Firstly
, cooking is not my cup of tea until I join the class at your school. The
course
is mainly focused on the preparation of main dishes, and I got a chance to learn how to cook a delicious chicken curry with potatoes which is one of my favourite curries.
Moreover
, the lessons are not only well prepared but
also
clear instructions given even for the beginners like me.
Furthermore
, I am cooking meals for my family almost every weekend since the
course
was completed and all of them are enjoying the dishes that I made for them. Cooking is a method of not only releasing stress but
also
improving
the
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mood.
In addition
, I would like to suggest you
to
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schedule a short
course
for making desserts and baking cakes in the coming weeks as I am very keen to make chocolate cakes and desserts for my housewarming party which will hold next month. I am looking forward to hearing about your upcoming class schedules to fulfil my request. Yours faithfully, Hninn Ei Ei Win
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