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In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using mobile phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

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In the modern era, the world is developing very high, all humans tend to do their work keeping simple and easy. In
this
 essay I will highlight and explain about
people
 may no longer be able to use
cash
, they tend to pay their
payments
 by using credit or debit cards and online through their mobile phones.
To begin
 with, let us look at the reasons for that,
however
, in my opinion,
while
 I believe, in fact of that excessively increased caused by COVID-19, that the catastrophe mainly influences for daily health habits of human beings, will we talk about habits of health,
cash
 notes are acting main influence rall for that,
therefore
people
 skip to pay
payments
 by
cash
, in fact of that
people
 tend to their shopping
payments
 by using cards.
Furthermore
,
people
 always trying to do their work easily that's why they do their shopping online using mobile phones, it's very easy and they can save money and time worthy. In the future ,case notes will disappear from the world.,
Secondly
 the government
also
 need to invest a lot of its funds to print
cash
 notes as well.
Hence
 government always think about their profitability.
Therefore
 they encourage
people
 to do their
payments
 by card or online
payments
. In ,addition
this
 modern payment method is not familiar to elderly
people
,
thus
 they make their
payments
 in
cash
, the government need to keep attention to that matter and encourage bankers to give benefits to senior citizens after they tend to their
payments
 through card
payments
 as well. In a nutshell,
this
 world needs modern methods to keep going smoothly,
therefore
people
 doing their
payments
 using cards and using phones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital payments
  • convenient
  • efficiency
  • reduce crime
  • tangibility
  • privacy
  • limited access to technology
  • job losses
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