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Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Every nation has its own culture. In
this
 regard, someone believes that a person's culture comes from their birthplace,
however
, someone thinks that home has a few affected on their culture. So, in
this
 essay ,I will write from both views and will give my opinion in the next paragraph. To being with, some places
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 their tradition and there listen
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 older person
such
 as in Asian
contries
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countries
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,
Thailand
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in Thailand
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 most
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teenager
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 always respect in parents. On the other point of view,
somepeople
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some people
 believe in themself
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childern
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children
 in America and Europe and in the present year, technology
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