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You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •Say what the participants liked about the hotel. •Explain why they were unhappy about the food. •Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future.

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Dear Mr Shoaib, I am writing to let you know about our organisation's feedback regarding a recent meeting held at the "Green Valley Hotel" on March 16, 2024. To commence with, the hall was spacious with minimal decorations, seats were cosy, and a large screen was available for presentation which helped us to conduct our meeting effectively.
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, the participants received an overwhelming response from the staff whenever something was ordered, it was provided at the earliest.
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, the workforce struggled a lot because of the limited refreshment options as only a few meat dishes were served
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 which vegetarians did not get a chance to eat their favourite food.
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, would you kindly share and confirm the menu at the time of placing an order? I recommend
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 as both the client and hotel will be aware of the dishes which will help to avoid any inconvenience. Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest. Yours sincerely, Haris Khan

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task achievement
To further improve task achievement, ensure all parts of the question are addressed with equal depth. While you've excellently covered what participants liked about the hotel and the issue with the food, elaborating on more specific suggestions for future improvements beyond menu sharing could make your response even richer.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, consider introducing a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more smoothly within and across paragraphs, adding to the overall clarity and flow of your letter.
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