You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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Many first-world

countries

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have been assisting

undeveloped

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the undeveloped

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in many aspects, especially financial

supports

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support

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, poverty, being one of the most important problems, is still obviously challenging for undeveloped

countries

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. Some people said that other sorts of support should be provided to poorer nations rather than giving them some

fundings

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funding

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. I totally agree with the statement and

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essay will demonstrate the reasons behind

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issue. First of all, not only financial

resource

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resources

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apply

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but

also

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a diversity of factors have been

roots

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the roots

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of the problem.

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low-quallity

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low-quality

education possibly results in poverty. To give more details, people living in undeveloped or developing

countries

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rarely have rarely received well-designed education because of its struggle to produce talented teachers.

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, citizens of those

countries

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are not equipped with

necessary

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competencies to pursue decent careers and to get

proper

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the proper

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amount of income.

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, providing financial

aids

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aid

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directly to governments

are

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probably useless. some governments have been managing their resources improperly leading to poverty and

inequallity

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inequity

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, in some

countries

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, funding,

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apply

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which the developed

countries

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financially assisted them, has been distributed unfairly to some particular departments and elite citizens.

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, individuals being in low

socioecomic

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socioeconomic

level

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levels

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did not get any benefits from the financial aid.

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, internal politics, which could not be improved by only providing financial help, has

plays

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a key role in

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issue. In conclusion, it seems to me that the poorer

countries

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should be assisted by providing other resources rather than just financial helps. It would be better if developed

countries

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support them by delivering educational

aids

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aid

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and suggestions on resource allocation and

politic

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political

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agreements.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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267 words

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