Some People believe that only the strongest individuals and teams can succeed in sports. Others think that success in sports depends on mental attitudes. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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people

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share different opinions about attaining achievement (making progress). A certain amount of

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that succeeding in a sport is possible only for the strongest teams or characters ,

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others believe in the champion mentality that leads them to

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. On the one hand , being talented or strong is base of promotion in certain fields like

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.It is said that only the strongest can achieve

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the weak haven’t

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in a

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society.

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, plenty number of five-star footballers are from Europe ,

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it is hard to be a world-class player for Asians

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because Europeans are really advanced in

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case.

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, it is obvious that human with strengths has ample opportunity to succeed easily.

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, advancement can be attained by psychological factors

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as mental attitudes.

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can be successful only by

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mentality that doesn’t let them give up. It does not matter what you are able to do right now, what is important thing is that you have desire and motives. One clear example is Yan Blahovich ,

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UFC champion who never gives up even

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him, and whose path to

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lasted more than fifteen years. In conclusion ,

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both viewpoints have enough arguments, I believe that in the

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depends on mental attitudes.

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are able to get strength by hardworking unlike owning mentality and wish

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Some People believe that only the strongest individuals and teams can succeed in sports. Others think that success in sports depends on mental attitudes. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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