Some People believe that only the strongest individuals and teams can succeed in sports. Others think that success in sports depends on mental attitudes. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the
sports
fields
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people
share different opinions about attaining achievement (making progress). A certain amount of
people
claims
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that succeeding in a sport is possible only for the strongest teams or characters ,
while
others believe in the champion mentality that leads them to
a
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success
. On the one hand , being talented or strong is base of promotion in certain fields like
sports
.It is said that only the strongest can achieve
success
,
accordingly
the weak haven’t
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in a
sports
society.
For instance
, plenty number of five-star footballers are from Europe ,
whereas
it is hard to be a world-class player for Asians
,
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because Europeans are really advanced in
this
case.
Finally
, it is obvious that human with strengths has ample opportunity to succeed easily.
On the other hand
, advancement can be attained by psychological factors
such
as mental attitudes.
People
can be successful only by
their
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mentality that doesn’t let them give up. It does not matter what you are able to do right now, what is important thing is that you have desire and motives. One clear example is Yan Blahovich ,
unexpected
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UFC champion who never gives up even
anybody
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believed
to
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him, and whose path to
success
lasted more than fifteen years. In conclusion ,
although
both viewpoints have enough arguments, I believe that in the
sports
field
success
depends on mental attitudes.
People
are able to get strength by hardworking unlike owning mentality and wish
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