The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006
The bar chart illustrates the worldwide sales of mobile phones,online,console and handheld
games
in the period between 2000 and 2006.
Overall
,the chart is measured in billions.At the start of,2000 there were only
two
kinds of
games
:handheld and console.
However
,with the development of technologies,in the
last
,
year
we can see all four of them.The biggest difference between them was in 2002.
Firstly
,as applicable was mentioned,in 2000 there were only console and handheld
games
.
However
,in the next
two
years mobile and online
games
joined apply them.At the,start the
number
of console
games
was 6
billion
and a handheld's-little bit less than 12.
However
,next years both of them had significant changes.Console
games
started to fall and did it till the end.In 2006 their
number
was about 3
billion
,
while
the
number
of handheld
games
' amount was becoming bigger and bigger from
year
to
year
.In the,end it rose to almost 18
billion
in sales.
Secondly
,
two
other kinds of
games
:mobile and online,started from about 1
billion
.In 2002 they had a gentel rise.
However
,in 2003 the
number
of mobile
games
was higher than online ones.
Besides
in the next
year
they were equiel again.For next
two
years their
number
continued to decrease and did it till the end.In 2006 the
number
of phone
games
was about 7 billions and the online's
number
was about 9 billions.
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