Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisement tell us about new product that may improve our lives. Which view do you agree or disagree?

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People
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people

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think that they don't need to buy
things
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by seeing
advertising
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the advertising

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. Another said their
life
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will improve to see new
products
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in
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the advertisement
an advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements

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. In modern
technology
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,technology

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every
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

things
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thing

The singular quantifier every is followed by the plural noun things. Consider changing the noun to the singular or using a different quantifier.

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sell by
display
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the display

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and
also
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most
of
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apply

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Use synonyms

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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

people
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the people

The phrase most of people may require the use of the article the. Consider inserting the before the noun in your sentence.

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they encourage by advertising new
products
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.
Those
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I those

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people
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who Don't like advertising
I
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apply

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agree
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onagree
toagree
withagree

The phrase following the intransitive verb agree seems to be missing a preposition. Consider adding one.

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them. In recent years
this
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is the generation of multimedia and modern technology and different companies sell their
products
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by using
advertisement
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advertisements

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online selling and computation is
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

more with different industries . They use different kinds of materials to show their stuff like Facebook, Instagram,
twitter
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Twitter

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, and
billboard
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a billboard

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on
road side
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roadside

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banners etc .so most
nation
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nations

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visit
on
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apply

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their site and increase their value of selling. They buy many kinds of stuff that they see in
there
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their

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life
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For the first time because in modern
time
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times

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we see most
of
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apply

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the thing
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thing
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things

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for the first term .
For example
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I
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in

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our country we did see more
things
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in our
life
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that abroad population use in their
life
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but advertising is the
one
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Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

things
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thing

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that we
aware
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are aware

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from
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of from

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the staff we look
.
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at .

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Linking Words

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

Furthermore
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,Furthermore

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I don't like online
advertisement
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advertising

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because in
advertise
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advertising

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they look
many
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at many

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of
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apply

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things
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in
online
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the online
an online

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market they look
low quality
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low-quality

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material and their rate is
also
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soo high . So in a
reality
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,reality

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they look
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Use synonyms

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Use synonyms

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one
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at one

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face and sell the other . In our country advertising is failed because most public
refuse
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refuses

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online marketing and
save
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to save

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money.
For
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example
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,example

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rate is high in online marketing but if we buy physical them we look
quality
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for quality

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and
rate
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the rate

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is
also
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not huge . In
conclusion
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,conclusion

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there are more advantages for the
people
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we set in abroad and like
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the product
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product
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products

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the buy and send their house because of
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one click
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one-click

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there is no time with
every
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everyone

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one
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and like most
of
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apply

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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

products
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the products

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online
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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