Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people think that homeschooling
children
is best for the
child
's growth and development but there are some people who believe that the
child
should attend
the
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school
. In
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we shall discuss the advantages of homeschooling and attending
the
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school
. First and foremost, the advantages of being homeschooled are that the parents can monitor the
child
and see how the
child
develops and what subjects is the
child
weak in and improve upon those subjects. The parents can
also
manage the time schedule of the
child
and give more time for activities which help the
child
develop. Homeschooling can help the
child
develop in a safer environment which is vital for the
child
.
In addition
, the
advantages
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of attending
school
is
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that the
children
can learn to communicate with other
children
which
helps
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develop the
child
's social skills. The
school
covers a vast majority of
subject
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the subject
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which the
child
learns
while
attending
the
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school
such
as physical activities like dodgeball and basketball which helps the
child
develop
physical
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and studying chess with other
children
helps the
children
develop mentally and improves
problem solving
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abilities. In my
opinion
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children
should attend
the
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school
as it helps the
children
develop many abilities and brings out
the
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potential
while
homeschooling
target's
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certain aspects of
child
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the child
a child
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to be developed.
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